Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
the government has a great impact on the development of different cultural activities and probably play the most important role because of the low and politics it involves. I wonder, which cultural activities need to pay attention more than others. In my opinion, art is equal and has the same impact on social life such as athletic activities. I think in this way for several reasons.
First, people differ from each other in many ways. If somebody approaches the arts, there will be some else support athletics game. That said is more important when many are spent in the worthy cases that encourage arts and games in the same way. every child on world need to have the
Second, those initiatives by the state has impact on moody's people. for instance in my country art has great support by the state and there are myriad of shows in fields of art, but the athletics has not the same attention. For this reason i have not ever been part of athletics shows and that prevent me by other country. To make the longer story short, i feel unhappy when i sow athletics on television and not in real way on my country. Therefor, state has quiet large weight on social and mood's people development .
In conclusion, when state approve the art and cultural policy need to evaluate both in the same directions because this has great impact on improving different skills and give the possibility to not feel bad about the native country when compare with other countries. So there needs attention for both cases to envolve creativity on those how dream to attend art or athletics pathway of life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1310.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 279.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69534050179 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44005687455 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541218637993 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 414.0 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1810101172 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5714285714 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9285714286 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153979679899 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526042896796 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467623526604 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0923602968352 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282383517381 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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