When people succeed in life, it is because of hard work. Being lucky has nothing to do with success in life.
In life one needs to put a lot of effort and energy to solve different problems, also to get significant decisions for our career,family and friends. Being lucky sometimes helps to find the best solution, but if each one of us is waiting for the luck to come, probably he willnot get what he expected in life. In my opinion, I totally agree that people succeed in life when they rely on hard work.
Firstly, everthing in our life depends on how much we try to get what we wish, and what we do to take it. By working hard we could be able to reach what we want and not surprisingly to go beyond that. For instance, when I was in high school, I had low average. Hence, my future was risked and with those grade i was not able to enroll a university. I had dreamed to be a doctor or teacher, but my scores did not favorize the chance to follow that dream. I decided to work every day and learn as much as I could to get good scores and increase my capacities as well. Fortunately, I made it because I fnished my studies for Finance- Accounting and now I work as a part time teacher in Accounting at the Economic University. As you could see, all I have reached are a result of my hardworking attribute I did since high school.
Secondly, we could not wait for the luck to come into us and bring what we expect because by doing that we waste our time and do not succeed at all. For example, my best friend never opened the book to study for her exam at school. She pretended she was lucky because she had the chance to copy to other excellent students during the exams. When she finished the school, she was interesed in finding a job, but she could not because she was not enough qualificating for the current position. Unfortunatel, this time the luck was not in her side neither the succeed .
In conclusion, We need to work hard if we want to reach and realize our dream in life. Definitely , the success comes with hard work and how much we do to get that success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.24533333333 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4494150598 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1819584733 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4444444444 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8333333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273751669012 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884400244931 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0865584474454 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192991879391 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0791965668773 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.37 10.9000537634 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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