some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
In my opinion, is better for young adults to live with their familires and not getting the independence for their parents. Being young increase the chance to get wrong decisions and getting into trouble with others. Additionaly, the parents have had a lot of experience in life and are able to knowing what is better for their children. The parents are the most important support for our life and being with them gives a lot of apportunity to young adults and so one. Is better to live secure and protect with our families and not to have independence form parents.
Firstly, being without experience in young age does not help to make better decisione for young adults' life. Therefore, parents help young adults to stay away from dangares thinks and situations. For example, my friend when he was young adult, did not want to live with his family. When he went to live alone, was get him self in dangours situation by invaiting strangers people at house. One night he was in policy office because his friend had stolen money at the shop. Hence, living with parents makes perfect person and leaves us away from dangers peoples.
Secondly, the parents are greater support for young adults. They advice for find the better solution and approval emontional support as well. for instance, when i was in high school, i went for holidays with friends. In that travel, I became sick and my friends were not able to do nothing for me. I was alone and in risk of life. if my parents had been with me, i would be safe and healthy.
In conclusion, living with families, for young adults is better because are protect and safe. Although, young adult risk to make wrong decision for their life without advice of their parents. so, i definitely stay that independence for young adults is not good idea and better is living with their families.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69254658385 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36088786697 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481366459627 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 463.5 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.0204257128 48.9658058833 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.55 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392622103954 0.236089414692 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140067418085 0.076458572812 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959374904771 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269502773923 0.150856017488 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0788205501734 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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