Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Governments have a huge amount of money that they collected from taxes. That money should be used for the benefit of the population. The most important question here is, how the government should spend this money? should they spend it on the arts or on sports? In my opinion, all governments should spend money on sports for many reasons, such as sports encourage people to live a healthy lifestyle, spread peace and represent the countries in international competitions.
First, sports encourage people to be healthy and that will help them to do better in their jobs. Sports help people to do more activities that will help people to become more healthy and reduce the risk of many diseases such as heart attacks and obesity. As an example, if our Government in Egypt will support running marathons in Cairo that will encourage people to take part in these marathons. A year ago I was on a tour in Aswan, there was a marathon funded and supported by Aswan`s Government. Many people took part in this event, I saw Aswan governor himself and many people who work in leadership roles in the government. The governor was encouraging citizens and tourists to take part in this huge event. There were many television channels broadcasting this event because it supports and raises funds for Professor Magdi Yacoub Heart Foundation, Also to encourage people to live a healthy life to reduce the risk of heart diseases. This event had a huge impact, this year the ministry of health has done an obesity test for all Egyptians. With no doubt, Aswan Governorate scored the less percentage of obesity and people who work in the government are the healthiest among all Egyptians. So, it is obvious, that sports are important. Sports will help both citizens and the government.
Second, Sports spread peace and represent countries in international competitions. During international competitions, you can see all countries` flags beside each other even if there is a war between a country and its neighbor. You may see two teams forget the war and are hugging and congratulating each other. For instance, I remember a football match that took place in the 2010 Football World Cup in Paris, France between Egypt and Israel. All people know that there was a war between Egyptians and Israelis. This war ended in 1973, but unfortunately, people never forget this war. However, During the match, both teams were respecting each other and doing their best to win, wave their flag and represent their mother country. Both teams got the same score, so there was no winner. After the match, the two teams hugged and congratulated each other for these scores and forgot that there was a horrific war between Egypt and Israel. So it is clear that sports such as football spread peace between countries.
Finally, Sports have a crucial role in our lives. Without sports, we will be unhealthy and that will affect the governments, also there will always be war and hate.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 216, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Should
...the government should spend this money? should they spend it on the arts or on sports?...
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Line 2, column 729, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun television seems to be countable; consider using: 'many televisions'.
Suggestion: many televisions
...ake part in this huge event. There were many television channels broadcasting this event becaus...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, for instance, no doubt, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2465.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68065290554 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 737.1 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.5217860887 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0357142857 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8571428571 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.67857142857 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11279840187 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0343832745765 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422244894099 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.069614380687 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683822651961 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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