Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
This has been a controversial debate on whether the government should spend more money in support of arts than is the support of athletics. As far as I am concerned, I agree with this statement, as I believe that art plays a dominant role in society. Arts not only fulfill the mental requirements of people but also can solve many problems in society.
To begin with, people need to fulfill their mental requirements. Nowadays, life is so stressful for people. Regarding their age, people are under big pressure to do their tasks to avoid its consequences. Stress can predispose people to mental and physical diseases. To release their stress people need to spend time in a quiet and stress-free atmosphere. Different types of art exhibition can provide this atmosphere for people. Visiting a painting or sculpture exhibition, visiting museums are exciting for people. Visiting different kinds of arts not only enable them to release their stresses and tiredness but also provides an opportunity for them to appreciate art. When it comes to me, I always like to visit carpet exhibition. Visiting different exhibition departs me from daily routine life. It is so relaxing for me because I can appreciate the beauty of art without thinking about my troubles.
Moreover, the government can solve many problems of society through art. In this case, different types of movies can present social problems. Increasing the awareness of people about social problems can solve many problems. For example, representing a movie about divorce and consequences of divorce on children may cause to decrease of divorce. Besides, people can learn lots of things from movies. For instance, people can become familiar with different cultures and traditions all over the world. Therefore movies can broaden the horizon of people. In my case, watching American movies helped me to improve my linguistic skills which were very useful for me in university.
On the other hand, donating money on art does not mean that the government should decrease the budget of sports teams. As like as art, all sports activities are exciting for people. Sports activities and sports matches can provide health and excitement to people. However, sports teams can find personal sponsors and there is no need for them to earn their money from the government.
In conclusion, I believe that spending money on art is indispensable for the government as funding money would fulfill the mental requirements of people and solve many social problems. However, I cannot deny the importance of sports activities for the community.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15952380952 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77862243394 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485714285714 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.787562195 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.3928571429 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135059530694 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0390400702692 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731146185978 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102881993667 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917637292754 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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