Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Most of the countries try to balance their budgets logically and spend it more in the areas which have more importance and priority for the country. Some people think that governments should allocate more money to support arts and artistic works. However, some others want their government to spend this budget for athletics and state sponsored Olympic teams. Personally, I believe that authorities ought to spend substantial amount of their money in financing Olympic team of the country for two main reasons.
First, it would present country's culture and artistic power more effectively. When any country or nation participates in Olympic Games which held each four years, people from all of the different states would come together in one place where any nation's social beliefs and cultural purity can be demonstrated more efficiently. For example, Iranian government put a lot of money to introduce its culture and ancient art to other countries and solve the misunderstandings about Iran. But, this solution seemed to be less attractive and brought less attention toward these issues, although huge amount of budget was allocated for this purpose. On the other hand, when Iran entered the last Olympic games with a great number of athletes, surprisingly, their presence and constructive disscusion with other nations changed everything significantly. So, supporting athletic works can benefit any country more than it normally imagine.
Second, it could create more beneficial jobs in the country which can even return the money that is spent for their preparation and participation. Olympic Games and generally sport competitions involve a great number of people. When a country decides to join the Olympic Games, it would definitely need several managing, coaching and medical teams to prepare their athletes. Also, there would be some constructions required to build fuculties for different sports to practice inside them. In spite of the fact that this procedure demands a lot of financial support, this money can easily be returned to the country by winning the games in the competitions, because there are notable prizes and awards for the Olympic winners that can compensate the money spend for them. For instance, Japan invested a lot of money to be good in Olympic Games. Later, researches showed that they also raised a great deal of money from the awards they got in the competitions.
In conclusion, spending governmental budget on sports field can have more positive effects for any country. It can show the country's culture and art more effectively. In addition, it would create more occupations for people living in the country. So, it could be a good idea to put our financial support on our athletes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...which held each four years, people from all of the different states would come together in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2300.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25114155251 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76006907096 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520547945205 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 711.9 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2252184232 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.523809524 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09523809524 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194760144171 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0689904640137 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626577338422 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140968200153 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573286442063 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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