do you agree or disagree with the following statement? the governments should spend money in support of art thanin support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympics teams
In today's modern and sophisticated world, it is needless to say that governments should spend their money to different activities. Between different groups of people, there is a controversy that how the governments should share its annually budget between art and athletics. Some of them agree with the former while, some of them support the later. In my view point, it is more important that government devote more money to the support of athletics than arts.
To begin with, devoting money on athletics have many benefit on people's physical and mental health. If the government spend money on the sport facilities, people will be encouraged to use these facilities. Therefore, they will have better health level. By this way not only the society will be happier, but also the governments will spend less money on individuals health care. As a result, for having healthier and happier society, it is better to spend more money on sports and athletics.
Furthermore, by paying more attention to the sports, more individuals will be trained professionally. So the country can count on these trained people get medals and prizes on the international competitions. In every society, these successes are very valuable not for its people but also for the governments. People will be proud of these international successes and it can raise the sense of nationalism. Moreover these prizes can be important in case of sponsoring for the government. Because many big companies will be interested in investing in that country. Therefore, in case of the benefits that these achievements can bring for the society and governments, it is significant that devote more fund on athletism.
To sum up, for its health benefits fore society and the governments an also because the achievements that can bring the international successes, it is better to devote more fund on athletics and sports. it seem that in the future because many merits that sport successes can bring, the governments will give more attention to the sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, as a result, in my view, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1701.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17021276596 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91796479213 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45896656535 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0457208928 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2777777778 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05555555556 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150902610778 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527945597024 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524464292577 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107763238004 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0933259954703 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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