some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade they get in school. do you think this is a good idea?
In today's progressive and sophisticated world, paying attention to the students by their parents is an important subject. This attention and care by parents can be done in different ways. There is a debate between people who if giving money to the children to appreciate them for their success in their courses is a good way or not. I support the notion that parent should give money to their children for a couple of reason.
Firstly, appreciate children by giving money can encounter them for more hard-working. Because the student know that if they try harder to get better grades in their courses, they can get more money and attention. Therefore, the idea that their endeavor will not be without any attention by their parent can be lead to more effort by them and they can get better result in their study. There is a self-experience about this idea. When I went to elementary school, my father said to me for every A plus grade that I gave in math, he would give me a constant amount of money. So I put my whole ability on learning the math to receive money from him. Now, after many years that endeavor made me to be a excellent in mathematic and i am a mechanical engineering.
Secondly, when school- age student achieve money, it can be helpful for them in their life. They can save that money for themselves and in a time that they need money for buying their stuffs or when they want to go out for a trip with their friend, they can use that money to spend for themselves without asking money from their parents. By this way, they can prepare their requirement by themselves. Moreover, because they do not ask the money from their parents, it can give them a self-satisfaction sense.
To sum up, because by giving money to the school-age children, it can be as a prize for their endeavor to encounter them for more efforts an in addition the student can meet their daily requirement and have a deposit for their future, this way of treatment can be good things. Nowadays, the families try to pay more attention to their children to prove that their success is important for them, So they try to give money or something like it to show their importance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: who is a if
... ways. There is a debate between people who if giving money to the children to appreci...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... many years that endeavor made me to be a excellent in mathematic and i am a mech...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... me to be a excellent in mathematic and i am a mechanical engineering. Secon...
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Suggestion:
...ey need money for buying their stuffs or when they want to go out for a trip with...
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Suggestion:
...thing like it to show their importance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59743589744 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59425349885 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458974358974 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2003682718 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.470588235 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9411764706 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352993527629 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134196892125 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641119715529 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25295846971 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182787232878 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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