do you agree or disagree with the following statement? the governments should spend money in support of art thanin support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympics teams
It goes without saying that in today’s world, governments invest their budget in various activities. While some people believe that governments should finance the arts more than sports activities, I am of the opinion that allocating financial support to athletics and sports is much more advantageous in every society. The reasons substantiating my viewpoint are explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, funding sports and athletics encourages more individuals to take part in sports team and follow their intrinsic talents in playing sports. To be more specific, in our modern era, the general public are engaged in their daily affairs such as education and work to the extent that they almost forget taking care of their well-being. However, supporting athletics might act like a motives for many people who are interested in playing sports professionally, but afraid of not being able to build a prosperous life in this way. It is no secret to anyone that when governments embark on financing athletics more than before, it gives not only the current sportsmen a sense of satisfaction but also it persuade other ordinary people, dreaming to be a member of a professional sports club, to begin doing exercise and try to achieve their goals in this way.
Furthermore, providing sports clubs with financial back up will enhance team members’ performance, generating a sense of confidence among the community. To put this point into a more vivid picture, when governments begin to allocate monetary support to athletics, for example, by either raising players’ income or providing them with higher quality sports facilities for training, it will enhance teams’ productivity. As a result, they will be able to win more competition than before, making the people of their state or country proud. It is no secret to anyone that when a sports team or athlete wins a match, its supporters experience a sense of satisfaction and pride, which can enhace the whole society’s happiness in a way.
As shown above, considering all the reasons and points mentioned above, it is safe to say that it is a more benefical approach that givernments fund sports activity more than the arts. Not only does supporting sports persuade more people to get involved in sports and follow their dream but also it will increase athletes’ performance, resulting a higher sense of confidence among the state’s members.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, for example, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27877237852 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00050906738 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542199488491 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.5876314024 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.769230769 100.406767564 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0769230769 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163297889083 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644913445159 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039230686618 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111038799078 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239181117077 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 11.7677419355 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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