Some parents offer their children-age school money for each high grade they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Throughout history, choosing the best way to motive children to get a high grade has been a challenging story for parents. Some people say the best way is forcing children to study. However, I firmly believe that parents can offer their children money for the high mark they get in school. There are two reasons why I think this is critically important, which I will elaborate in the following essay.
The first remarkable point to be mentioned is that giving money is the best motivation for children-age school; it means children to be encouraged to study more and get a high mark. Parent should attract their children to study, and parents can show them with high grades can cause to have income. Also, children for studying need a motivation thing, and they prefer to receive money. My cousin is a compelling example of this. When he was younger, he didn't get any high grades in physics. After a while, his parents promised him if he got a high mark in physics, they would give him money. Finally, because of giving money, he did all of his efforts and got a high grade in physics. This example demonstrates that money is the best motivation for children.
The second reason I would like to mention is that in this way, children learn to earn money and save it. It is the best economical way to teach children how to deposit their money. In this way, parents can reach two goals; getting their children high grades and showing how to saves money to their children. In my individuals' experience, when I went to school, my parents gave me some money for my high grade, and said to me kept your money and saved it then you can buy a doll. Finally, I deposited a lot of money and could buy my favorite doll. After this story, I learn how to save my money, thanks to my parents.
To wrap it up, all the reasons to be mentioned above lead us to the conclusion that it is the best way that parents offer their children money for a high mark they get in their school. This is because this way causes them to motive their children to study more, and children learn how to earn and save money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, second, so, then, while, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.453125 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34859308644 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4296875 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1776403067 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.454072099974 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15712719373 0.076458572812 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100300695876 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.331922565774 0.150856017488 220% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336206770819 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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