People in society work in many different settings, and for a variety of reasons. What do you think is the main reason why people have jobs?
a) to feel happier about their lives, b) to save money for the future, c) to develop new skills
Throughout history, many people with a superficial mindset only choose a job to save money. However, I firmly believe that the most reason for having a job is to feel happier about our lives. In the following paragraph, I will elaborate on my viewpoint by introducing two reasons.
The first remarkable point to be mentioned is that having a job gives our life a sense of purpose; it means we have a big motivation for continuing our life, thrive in our personal lives, and finally, it's good for our mental health. One of the most impacts of not having a job is we feel depressed and useless. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Several years ago, when I graduated from university, I couldn't find any jobs and had to sit in the house and look at the wall. I extremely felt depressed, and I became an aggressive person. Anybody couldn't speak to me. After a while, finally, I found a job based on my major and interest. This event caused me to became a normal person with a lot of a sense of purpose. This example demonstrates that having a job is good for mental health and gives our life a lot of goals.
The second reason I would like to mention is that jobs give us opportunities to meet different people with a different mindset and social position. People don't have any job, they can only see and interact with limited people, such as their families, their friends, and so forth, and it is very boring that they see duplicate people a lot. For example, it's very interesting to me that seeing different people. I think it helps me to recognize different cultures, mindsets, dialects, and so on. When I worked in a store, although my income was not high, I loved my job because I visited many people every day, and it was very satisfying for me.
To wrap it up, all the reasons mentioned above lead us to the conclusion that having a job causes us to feel happier about our life. This is because a job gives us goals to thrive and have a better life, and gives us opportunities to meet different people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, look, second, so, while, for example, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46361185984 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59347379398 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504043126685 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3175667601 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1578947368 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5263157895 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36842105263 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282597908687 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834477133493 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712779253878 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190234400381 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0793770444119 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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