Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, people always discussed how they spent their free time with their children. Some people prefer doing their times with their children doing things that are related to schoolwork. However, I firmly believe parents should their free time playing with their children. There are two reasons why I think this is critically important, which I will elaborate in the following essay.
The first remarkable point to be mentioned is that spending time to have fun playing games or sports causes children and parents more close to each other; it means children can communicate easily with their parents. Parents must have a friendly relationship with their children. My cousin is a compelling example of this. When my cousin was young, My aunt didn't have any free time because she worked a lot in a big company. She never played with her son, and almost forgot that she has a little boy. And he didn't have a friendly relation with his mother. After a while, a doctor on TV said about the importance of a relationship with parents and their children. After that, my aunt found that her way of treating her son is wrong and changed her way. They become a friend and having the best time with each other, thanks to the doctor.
The second reason I would like to mention is that when parents spend their free time to have fun playing games with their children, it causes children never to feel lonely and don't be depressed. When children are alone for a long time, they will be depressed and aggressive. Back in the past example, my cousin extremely aggressive at that time. He didn't speak with anyone, and he just shouted all the time. After my aunt spent her time with him, he got better and converted a calm little boy. This example demonstrates that parents should spend their free time to have normal children mentally.
To wrap it up, all the reasons mentioned above lead us to the conclusion that parents should spend their free time to have fun playing games or sports with their children. This is because children can communicate easily with their parents, and children never feel alone and don't be depressed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, second, so, while, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1760.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76964769648 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3536019795 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466124661247 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 512.1 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.0542030363 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8095238095 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5714285714 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.45110844103 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.449540581773 0.236089414692 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154790901519 0.076458572812 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110478946183 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306152046253 0.150856017488 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427947600017 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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