These days, people enjoy a lot of time away from their work and school obligations. Many people use this time to visit new places and learn about them. What do you think is the best way to learn about a place you are visiting for the first time? (396 words)
a) Going a museum, b) Joining a guided tour of popular attractions, c) Visiting a popular shopping area
Always, choosing entertainment for holidays is a challenging story between members of families. Some people are leading proponents of the claim that go shopping is the best way to spend their holiday. However, I firmly believe that for enjoying a holiday, people should go to museums. In the following paragraph, I will elaborate on my viewpoint by introducing two reasons.
The first remarkable point to be mentioned is that modern museums are very exciting and accessible; it means they are a great way to obtain and learn new knowledge. Today, museums are designed very well and attract people to see there. In the past, museums were filled with a lot of boring handcraft, and people didn’t attract to see there. Because of this reason, a few people went to museums. In my individuals' experience, when I was younger, I didn't like to go to a museum. I always thought a museum is a boring place that older people went to it, and spend their time in it. One day, my friend invited me to go to a museum and visited there. I went there without any eager. After I saw many interesting things such as pottery, inscription, cloth, and so forth, I found we have a rich culture and learned many things that there were in the past. I obtain a lot of knowledge about our life ancestor, thanks to my friend.
The second reason I would like to mention is that museums show all the things that happened in the past without removing any things on it. Some tour leaders don't say everything that happened in the past, such as negative points that were in a government. For instance, when my family and I went to Shiraz, our tour leader was a funny man and said many jokes and funny things about the past. He said to us, I don't tell you negative and bad things about the past culture. But I believe we know all the things about people living in the past, both positive and negative attributes.
To wrap it up, all the reasons, as mentioned earlier, lead us to the conclusion that people should visit museums when they take a holiday. It happened because museums are very exciting and learn a lot of things about the past, and museums tell the truth about governments and many things that were in the past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, well, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1808.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56565656566 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51083764571 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472222222222 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.387897444 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0952380952 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8571428571 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04761904762 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201821385162 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059136734298 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432865696193 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121671300728 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385032654978 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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