Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governmer should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.．
The government can build a better connection with another country and another city by supporting more sports activities. A positive connection can provide provinces or countries valuable opportunities to exchange their ideas about commercials and cultures, then select the essence and discard the dross. For example, the 2008 Olympic Games in Beijing, people of all countries gathered together to proceed the national sports competitions, which not only drove the financial development of Beijing, but also widely spread Beijing’s traditional culture by the locals had a lot of contact with foreign friends. Like those activities, of course, can not lack the support from the country, but the local government also played a significant role during the whole process, like motivating citizens’ motivation and perfecting the city decoration.
The financial support from the government is the best advertisement to encourage people to enhance their physical condition by taking as much exercise as possible. In the 2015s, the local government at Zhengzhou took an investigation to find out whether the government’s activities are able to have a great extent influence on their citizens. The result is very striking that almost 60 percent of participants always pay attention to their government’s work and activities, and nearly 80 percent of people will be stimulated by the government’s encouragement. This research amply supports my viewpoint that individuals’ awareness to take exercise will gradually reinforce as the local governments put a lot of funds on this field, like organizing the collective activities or putting plenty of ads at public places.
In 2015, the government of Zhengzhou,which is a new fist-class city, carried out an experiment to find out whether the slogans or some activities of them have practical function on their citizens in order to make a more exact feature plan. The result is very striking, which more than 60 percent of citizens expressed that they are easily stimulated by the government’s efforts. This investigation not only extremely provided the local government a bright sight about making decisions also amply supported my viewpoint that individuals’ awareness to take exercise will gradually reinforce as the local institution gain more funds from the government to organize collective activities.
Admittedly, some people hold that arts will bring about more positive effects to a country as magnificent buildings can bring profound memories to their visitors. While others strongly believe that arts is undependable for a developing city to get some progress, superficial appearance really has no function to build a soiled connection with other countries. On the contrary, sports contain a lot of motivations, like the Olympic spirit, active effects for the human’s body, solid connection with other countries. Those are veritable responsibilities the government has to take.
To put in a nutshell, spending more money in support of athletics is a wise decision. Like organizing more public activities with neighbouring areas. This is definitely accompanied by desirable consequences.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, then, while, as to, for example, of course, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 8.0752688172 359% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2703.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63125 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.48371147768 2.67179642975 130% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508333333333 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 822.6 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.6687877007 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.166666667 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123784572127 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490533950764 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597895718017 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0891916677635 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540607749235 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 10.9000537634 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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