Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
In a sophisticated today's world, finding a proper job position is a crucial matter for everyone. Individuals have different expectations of their job. Some people think they should get a secure job even if they are not satisfied with that, some others stand on the other side of the continuum, believing that they should only attend to the jobs that derive the sense of satisfaction. I, personally, subscribe to the former group, for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in future paragraphs.
To begin with, all people need to have a job in order to meet their necessary requirements. On the other hand, nowadays that people are struggling with the unemployment crisis, finding a job became a complex problem. Therefore, in this hectic conditions, it is better for individuals to use all potential job offers even if they do not like them. The lack of a job brings about different problems for people. For example, the ones who cannot find a job for a long time are highly probable to be depressed as a result of financial problems and lack of a normal life. So, having a carrier, people can get rid of some important problems such as poverty and mental diseases like depression. There are a lot of people who are not pleased with their vocations, however, they feel euphoria because they can properly overcome their requirements. By and large, although having a satisfying career has many merits for a person, there is no guarantee of finding it very soon. So, people should use all opportunities that come to them.
Second, communication and experience are the two substantial factors in finding a job. Attending a job, individuals can get acquainted with numerous people in the workplace that may help them to find a suitable job position. They are more likely to be introduced to other companies through their colleagues. In this situation, people not only use the advantages of being employed, but they also have more chances to find a better job in the future that makes them delightful. Also, in this vein, they can enhance their experience and develop their knowledge and as a result of this, provides a strong and well-rounded background for themselves. Hence, they have more chance to get their favorite job offers. For instance, when I graduated from university, my father suggested a job position in his friend’s small company. Despite my unwillingness about that job, I subscribed to that and worked there for two years. After two years that I achieved a lot of valuable experiences, one of my workmates introduced me to a prestigious company and they accepted me, for my strong resume.
All in all, with these two mentioned reasons into account, I vehemently assert that people should not ignore a secure job for the sake of a better job. If they start working, not only can they afford their financial needs, but they also can get promotion in work and feel satisfied.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 183, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
...merous people in the workplace that may help them to find a suitable job position. They are more ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, by and large, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2409.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87651821862 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81559154894 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491902834008 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 752.4 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1939758404 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.375 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5833333333 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358011457525 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116334495673 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573116535861 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252586456192 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256657684586 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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