Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Even though sometimes people surrender to reality that they instantly take a job currently offered for them, I disagree that people should make such a choice. Instead, as far as I'm concerned, people should wait for more opportunities - a more satisfying job - to come.
First, it can be grinding for people to do the same boring work day by day. If they do not find the job interested, they will be likely to either live depressed lives or leave the position finally. Besides, companies providing satisfactory roles also supports employees with sufficient benefits, such as offering their meals, workout spaces and company trips. Those can certainly make working life easier and improve the person's well being overall. In comparison, a secure but not gratifying job may not include those precious offerings that will add color to our lives.
Second, a satisfying job, which is often highly relevant to the worker’s expertise, can help gain opportunities in proceeding his or her own goals. As a result, people can gain a sense of fulfillment, which is an important element people can get from their work lives. For example, chances of attending training sessions, conferences and participating in group project can foster employees’ knowledge and skills, enabling them to pursing a broader prospect on their careers. On the other hand, secure jobs, which are often times less challenging and tedious, can reduce people’s motivation of honing their professional abilities.
Lastly, if we examine the question from a more rational instead of ideal perspective, once people take a job, they have to take on responsibilities that cannot be laid down easily. Therefore, it would be harder for them to look for a job since there are too many burdens to consider. For instance, my mother decided to work for a small accounting firm in a managerial role while looking for better positions from bigger companies. Yet, she had to finish so many tasks and also had to train other new workers. Also, it took a lot of process and time to transfer data and accounting records to other employees. At last, she could not easily quit the position and gave up searching for another one.
To sum up, I think that considering a brighter future along with realistic issues possibly faced with, job-seekers should definitely wait for roles that would be more satisfying while continuously sharpening their competence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, if, lastly, look, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12182741117 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8305591489 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626903553299 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4166575711 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.111111111 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0555555556 5.45110844103 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356301309598 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10356142169 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.091031564541 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207112385971 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865603710681 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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