Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country.
In such a civilized society, in spite of several disagreements people have in various areas, so far as one’s view goes, one point that virtually everybody approves upon is the importance of schools in society. This is mostly owing to the fact that they are the foundation of every country. With this in mind, a broad range of controversial attitudes might simulate heated debates as to whether improvement of schools plays a significant role in the development of a country or not. Among different opinions, I personally believe this statement because of two conspicuous reasons which are in ensuing lines.
The first and prominent reason comes to mind is that a prosperous country which is able to compete with other high technology countries is the result of having well and improved schools. In other words, there is a direct relation between schools quality and development of a country. Improving schools with hiring high knowledge teachers and allocating high-quality facilities, encourage all of the students to study well and boost their knowledge level, as a result, make a highly stable country in the future. According to a reputable study which done two years ago at the Sharif University of Technology, among successful persons of a society, which consisted of ministers, full professors, etc. it was found that their education and knowledge has thrived in a high-quality school.
Another point which deserves some words here is the fact that schools have a great influence on every country's economic growth. For example, when I was a student, our school added an additional class, which was about the best ways to use the money. By this class, I learned lots of things which became more useful in my life. This class taught me how to make a decision in a critical condition with spending less money in order to achieve a high profit. It is cogently obvious that a huge percent of economic achievements of a country has been for the sake of the business mans, originated from improved schools, who have been able to overcome difficult conditions. Therefore, improving schools not only flourish every person’s talents but also prosper their other personalities which directly related to the improvement of a country’s economy.
In conclusion, there are lots of reasons which can be persuasive enough to improve schools. Based on the given reasons above, it is obvious that if a country wants to become unique in the world should pay more attention to developing of schools. It is suggested that a survey should be conducted to find more information about this issue.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...attitudes might simulate heated debates as to whether improvement of schools plays a signific...
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...ting high-quality facilities, encourage all of the students to study well and boost their ...
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Message: This phrase might be redundant. Use simply 'added a class'.
Suggestion: added a class
...ample, when I was a student, our school added an additional class, which was about the best ways to use t...
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...mprovement of a country's economy. In conclusion, there are lots of reasons...
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Suggestion:
...find more information about this issue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2171.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07242990654 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86933677034 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565420560748 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.394523757 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.611111111 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7777777778 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166099164467 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532685262869 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0398163223742 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0999878320759 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454440284956 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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