Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent’s jobs.
There is no shortage of debate that everyone has their own interests in jobs and they choose their jobs according to their interests. But, sometimes, in order to raise our chance for success, we have to choose a job which we are not interested in so much. This job can be our parent’s job or any other proper job. As far as I am concerned, it’s better to choose a related job to our parent’s job because of the following reasons.
To begin with, one should take into account the fact that our parents have worthwhile experiences in their job and by choosing that job or a related one, we can use these experiences. our parents have encountered the same dilemma which we may face, so in the emergency situation, we can not only trust them to solve our problem but also choose the best solution. My personal example illustrates this fact better. My father had a company and a few years ago, he retired so he suggested me to accept his position. Although I was never interested in managing, I accepted his suggestion. Last year I faced an enormous bust and I really was confused about what should I do but, my father has experienced this issue so he guided me. Thanks to his advice, I overcome the problem. While if I didn’t use his experience, I would not able to solve the problem independently.
Furthermore, by choosing a related job to our parent’s job, we can conserve our time and energy. In fact, we have got familiar with their job so we have rudimentary knowledge about that job. Therefore, we don’t need to spend our time and energy to learn a new thing and new field which we want to work on. For instance, after my brother’s graduation, my father suggested him to work in his company, but he liked to work in a restaurant as a chef while he didn’t have any experience in that filed but he was completely familiar with my father’s work. Eventually, he was hired in a restaurant and it took him a long time and a lot of energy to learn about cooking. On the other hand, if he worked in my father’s company, he would not only conserve his time and energy but also boost his position during this time.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is a wise decision to choose a related job to our parents because they are experienced in that field and can help us. Also, we can save our time and energy because we don’t need to learn a new skill.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Our
...ated one, we can use these experiences. our parents have encountered the same dilem...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, really, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1976.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53211009174 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81009919368 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465596330275 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.750653262 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221043365437 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08223148922 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802164042989 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159992969827 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0901977103247 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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