Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs rather than choose jobs that are very different o their parents'.
Working is the first step of being independent for children no matter what kind of family they are born into or what kind of society they are living in. It is a heated debate that whether children should follow their parents and have a job like then or not. Personally, I am of the opinion that children should follow their dreams and have a different job than their parents. I will develop my standpoint for two conspicuous reasons which have been stated in the following essay.
In the first place, the remarkable point to be mentioned is that children are sharply different from their parents in ideas, dreams, interests, and so on, especially in this advanced modern era. In other words, It is undeniable that children may have various tastes in choosing their dream jobs which is going to be a big part of their adult life to live with. Otherwise, their job would be not only boring but also a severe obstacle in their professional life. My friend is an excellent example to elaborate on this. His father was a successful scientist in chemistry, which was the main motivator for him to choose chemistry to study at the university. After his graduation, he started his job as a chemist alongside his father but after a while, he found his job just boring and exhausting that he could not stand with anymore. Consequently, he resigned from his career and went after his personal interests to find his dream job. As a result, following parent's job just lead to wasting priceless time that we wish we should have spent on creating our own path of life.
The second worthwhile reason to be noted is that society requires a wide variety of jobs which some of them are crucial to have advanced society. To be more specific, if children pick up jobs similar to their parents the community they live in, would become limited to some primitive jobs that cannot bring an advanced society for us. My family is an apt illustration of this. Generation after generation jobs have changed in our family; for example, my grand grandfather was a simple farmer his daughter became the first academic doctor in the city; my grandmother was a chef whereas her son became a psychologist, my father is a senior teacher while I am a genetic engineer. As can be seen, existing various careers are paramount to reach a progressive community. Never had we changed our profession, may none of these vital careers would have been brought to our city.
To wrap up what has been discussed, I strongly support the idea that children should be utterly free in choosing their careers. If children choose their parent's careers, probably they going to change it sooner or later since it's not their true dream job. Besides, existing different professions are necessary for every society to get advanced.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, if, may, second, so, then, whereas, while, for example, kind of, as a result, in other words, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2299.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76970954357 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58852079437 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520746887967 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9164130097 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.476190476 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9523809524 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362260892226 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115129824059 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103354844908 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248555980173 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565977978213 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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