Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Sponsoring which kind of sector in the community by the government has been a controversial hotly debate throughout history. However, some social members hold the idea that more money should be devoted to the sports sector such as athletics, there is an opposite attitude that deserves more sponsoring by governments. Personally, it is my firm conviction that much more budget should be dedicated to art. Stating two of which conspicuous reasons in the ensuing paragraphs, there are loads of rationals to support my stance.
The first worthwhile mentioning reason is that art is a distinct identical part of every society that is known with it while athletics could be found in every society. Sponsoring Kurdish dance a compelling example of this. Kurdish dance is the only type of dance that can be performed just as a team, it is also one of the most ancient dances in the world, which was forgotten in my country. As a consequence, the authorities established a national institution to sponsor interested people in Kurdish dance. Last year a team of Kurdish dance won an international title for the best performance of dancing, and Kurdish dance has become more popular, which most of the people can recognize it, worldwide since it is just for Kurdish people specifically. Were the government not supported Kurdish dance as a type of art, no one would know about it even our country.
The second notable point to be admitted is that art has become a part of everyone's daily life in which helps them to cope with life difficulties through decreasing the level of stress and work pressure. Listening to music or attending musical concerts is the epitome of this. It is undeniable that music can relieve everybody's mind after a tough workday; therefore, if governments support artists they would provide us with more songs and concerts as a result of less financial concerns that nowadays's singers are struggling with. Consequently, not only do artists but also people will benefit from sponsoring art. As a result, owing to have easier access to music as the most known kind of art, folks are capable of relieving their mind in this chronic modern era.
To wrap up what has been discussed, I reckon that art should be supported more than athletic teams financially. This is because art is an identity if every nation should be preserved that requires money. Besides, sponsoring art results in lower pressure of life that lead to a happier life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, while, as for, i reckon, kind of, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93220338983 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77012817272 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544794188862 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7073927726 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.166666667 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9444444444 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27777777778 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260394484063 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816152319598 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614758766275 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170547167842 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603250652966 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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