In the face of an ever changing economy with increasingly fierce competition among candidates in job market, today Chinese graduates are more cautious about choosing their jobs. Some people assume that seeking jobs with their parents' assistance is detrimental to ones' personal development in the long run, whereas others hold an opposite attitude. From my perspective, I prefer finding a job similar to my parents.
First off, it is highly possible that children have a better chance to engage a promising career with their parents' guidance. To begin with, parents equipped their children with sufficient resources and information before they making crucial decision about future career. As is known to all, graduates often struggle with job choices due to lack of experience, as they don't know which job will fit their major and have prospects for advancement at the same time. While, having decades of work experience in one filed parents are the natural mentor to their kids. In this case, if children want to work in the same field of endeavor as their parents, they will be furnished with abundant industry information from their parents, so that they can make more accurate choices to launch their career. What's more, parents are able to provide timely aids to help kids eliminating bottlenecks in their works and advance their profession, because they have experienced similar situation in their careers.
Secondly, doing similar jobs for family members enables individuals to enhance their family ties. Nowadays, people concentrate more on themselves instead of on family bonds. That is because smart phones and time-consuming apps take up too much time of their daily life. Thus they do not have time or willingness to communicate with each other; even if they want to talk, they hardly find the common topics. However, doing a similar job changes this situation. Take my family as an example, I used to have nothing to talk about with my father. Even though we had dinner together, we were often absorbed in browsing through the short-form videos on apps, like TikTok, on our cell phones. Nevertheless, after I had a job like my father’s, we share more mutual topics than before. Honestly, it was quite astonishing to me that one day I could communicate with my father harmoniously, arguing which way is best to deal with patients and their families as a doctor and other subjects related to our jobs. Thanks to the frequent daily talks, the relationship between my father and I becomes much better.
To conclude, sticking to parents' vocation is an appealing option as it contributes not only to children's career development but also to their family relationships.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, honestly, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10454545455 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71166366548 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581818181818 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7685956928 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.3 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0975748479121 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0349368667045 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0253992098265 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.061319245669 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0161508943888 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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