Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In recent times, there has been a widespread debate on whether children have to pick a job similar to their parents’ jobs or not. While some people believe it is better for children to choose different career when they grow up, I hold the opposite view. I think kids have to choose career similar to their parents’ jobs.
To begin with, children will broaden their knowledge about the field quickly when they pick same parent’s career. Everyday parents will talk with their children about mistakes that might happen with them in work and teach them the proper way to avoid these critical mistakes. For example, Steve Jobs had learned from his father many things about how to operate business. He taught him the ideal way to compete with people in the market. Therefor, he was able to learn several information from his father.
In addition to learn quickly, kids will be able to succeed easily when they choose the same job as their parents. Parents will build a huge relation while they are working in the field, so they can talk with these people to promote their kids. For example, when my brother Aymen decided to work in media as my father do, my father spoke with his manager to put my brother in a good place. After tow years, he was able to become the supervisor in the company because his way was full with flowers. Everyone was supported him because these people know my father very well.
Last but not least, children will make a lot of money when they choose job like their parents. They will go ahead in the job very fast without doing mistakes. For instance, when Bill Gates started his career, he knew everything about the field because his father taught him earlier. Therefore, he established Microsoft company very quickly and make a lot of money. Moreover, he was able to open several branches around the world and earn more money. All that happen because he picked career like his father.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is better for kids to choose job like their parents. This is not only because they will learn about the job quickly, but also they will succeed in short time, and make a lot of money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in short, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2400348731 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481578947368 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.2373196733 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.0476190476 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0952380952 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301665350881 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106224572508 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954974798427 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210060137359 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0881630765828 0.0645574589148 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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