Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for younger people to take risk and explore new things than older people.
Recently the phenomenon of taking a risk has sparked a heated debate. In this connection, different people have distinct abilities for exploring the environment. Although contested by many that the matter of taking a danger to exploring objects is more beneficial for the old one rather than a young person, such an issue is regarded as both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I concur with the notion that it is appropriate for young people to look at new things, and I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.
Firstly, young people can stand difficulties in a risky way significantly; however, old people give up immediately, so they are not able to take a risk. To be more specific, the young person's particular characteristic which is patience makes them different from the older one and increases their ability to bear problems occurring in a chancy route due to finish tasks. According to my own experience, I decided to go on a camping trip with my grandfather to watch stars two years ago, and we were in a group whose members are young except my grandfather. We rented a van to go there, and all members were happy and singing in the way. Therefore, my grandfather complained all the time because of the noise. Moreover, when we made a fire and watched stars on a cold night, he argued with us because he could not tolerate low temperatures, so much so that he returned to a city and did not complete this new experience.
Secondly, as older people suffer from many diseases, they can not tolerate risky situations, but younger people are strong enough to handle them. To elucidate, taking risks are full of stress, and people can not deal with this high mental pressure unless their health conditions are stable. For example, last summer, I went to a mountain to experience the new challenge which was Benji jumping. When I received there, there was an ambulance to transfer the person who was old to a hospital. After I asked about the old fellow, people told me that the man had a heart attack according to experiencing the stress of Benji jumping; however, many young people enjoy this experience, and it is not detrimental for them.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on both sides, I profoundly believe that despite a young person, an old one should avoid risks. Aged humans not only cannot cope with the difficulties of exploring new objects but also suffer from pain by experiencing stress.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a risky way" with adverb for "risky"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ly, young people can stand difficulties in a risky way significantly; however, old people give...
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Line 7, column 274, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uffer from pain by experiencing stress.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2047.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83924349882 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80497026735 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553191489362 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2533464916 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.411764706 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8823529412 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248417710151 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786370634424 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636549151811 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152166079892 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757103761281 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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