Some young people are free in the evenings or have days off at school, which way can bring them the most benefit?
• To accumulate work experience by a part-time job or volunteering in a community
• Learning to play a sport
• Learning to play a musical instrument
In today's modern and sophisticated world, having a break provides an ideal opportunity for people to perform a desirable affair. In this connection, students can utilize their break to attend a task in which they are interested. Although some people believe that experiencing a part-time career is beneficial for students, many other people hold the view that playing a sport brings them the most advantage. There is still the third group who concur with the notion that it is helpful for learners to play a musical instrument when they are free. I agree with the second group's opinion, and I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.
First, as many exercises are a team effort, students learn how to cooperate with others due to achieving success. To elucidate, collaboration plays a vital role in students' lives because they become familiar with other attitudes and notions; moreover, working in a group makes people flexible. According to my own experience, my son was a selfish boy who did not like to see other pupils' success; however, he made a host of efforts to achieve his goals. Last year, when he had days off at his school, I enrolled him in a volleyball team to realize the importance of cooperation in life. When he played sports, he had opportunities to interact with who has different ideas from him, leading to getting along with the rest of the team due to winning. By doing so, he has understood that it is beneficial when several people try hard to gain one specific scope; thus, he has encouraged for helping other people and asking for help.
Second, children should participate in a sports class because they do not have enough time at school to do some exercise, which causes many health problems for them. To be more specific, many learners suffer from obesity and diabetes stemming from the lack of physical activities. For example, when I was a university student, I had a considerable amount of homework, which did not bring extra time to have physical activities since I spent a wealth of time in the library to study materials. As a result, I was getting fat, which was detrimental to my health. Fortunately, my university decided to hold a swimming class in the evening for students, and I stimulated to engage in the class as it was free. By attending a class I not only became fit but also did not feel pain in my backache.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on each side, I profoundly believe that learning sports can be a plus for learners during a break. Not only do sports help them to learn collaboration, but they also reduce the risk of ailments.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'groups'' or 'group's'?
Suggestion: groups'; group's
... they are free. I agree with the second groups opinion, and I will analyze my reasons ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'pupils'' or 'pupil's'?
Suggestion: pupils'; pupil's
...lfish boy who did not like to see other pupils success; however, he made a host of eff...
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Line 8, column 243, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... they also reduce the risk of ailments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, third, thus, while, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78145695364 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72499903377 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547461368653 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4671786192 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8421052632 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227002243088 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653935268868 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590963441192 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137943625137 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430102132944 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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