Celebrities (such as actors, musicians and athletes, etc.) sometimes express their political views in public. Some people appreciate knowing the political views of celebrities, others think it is not appropriate or useful to know the political views of celebrities. Which opinion do you agree with?
In today's modern and sophisticated world, celebrities' opinions play a vital role in a society. In this connection, some popular person express their political views to the public. Although contested by many that the matter of being familiar with celebrities' notions in political fields is highly beneficial, such an issue is regarded as both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I concur with the notion that knowing political views of celebrities is detrimental, and I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.
First, celebrities are not professional in political major, so their view are not useful for people. To be more specific, actors or athletes have abilities in their own field, so their political information is as same as ordinary people; thus, they are not a reliable instructors. For example, in the president election five yeas ago, one musician support one candidate. Because this musician was popular between people, they follow his view, and the supported candiate became a president. After few months, our country faced a host of challanges according to the wrong president's decisions. When people blamed that musician, he said that he did not comprehend the negative points of the man whom he was supporting. Moreover, he confessed that he was not adept in political major.
Secondly, celebrities should not inform people about their ideas because they not consider the public benefits in their opinion. To elucidate, celebrities do not express their view objectively, so they conceive themselves in their opinions. According to my own experience, when a government voted for improving transportation systems, one famous actor showed his disagreements. Therefore, many people encouraged to pursue him, and they did not vote to this project positively. After one year, transportation system became ruined, so much so that citizens could not used them, and they experienced a hard time as many of them did not have a private car. However, celebrities had modern cars, lack of transportation was not important for them. Accordingly, people grasp that their daile issues are not supported by celebrities, and they should ignore them in political decisions.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on each side, I profoundly believe that it is not helpful for the public to be aware of celebrities' political notions. Not only do not celebrities have suitable knowledge in realm of politics, but they also express their ideas based on their own benefits.
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...heir ideas based on their own benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2124.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33668341709 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99992424338 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55527638191 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1541609789 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.2 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374558210361 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116927374066 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.097721779662 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23973720753 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0714078436904 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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