Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in today’s progressive world where we live, humans are suceptable to a lot of news and events which sorrounding them easily. Most scientists, believe that, knowing about events around the world have negative effect on daily life and people feel stress emotions which reduse their ability to control their life. However, I am of the opinion that,beeing aware about the events is a essential in our life. The reasons to support my ideas are illustrate in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, sometimes some economical decision and events had been released by the government and they have direct influence in your life. In order to be find out the result, you have to follow the events that occour sorrounding yourself. For instance,last year, the government announced that the salary of each employee would be increse about 20% in each company. Thus, when I receive my salary at that time,I noticed that, this changes had not been considered and appaeled to reconsider my salary by financial manager. As a result, if I did not imitate the all events, I did not recognize it and persuaded my job as a before.
Furtheremor, sometimes happenning the events can related to special region and beeing aware about the events are very essential for people who live there. For example, a couple of years ago, some news world informed that some region in iran are being susceptable to earthquacks. Therefore, it was a critical situation which we should consider about it. Consequentley,local building companies scheduled the urgent meeting with president and try to find a solution for new building planning. So, all of these make the security that help to people safety.
In concolusion, having considered above mentioend, I strongly believe that, knowing about the events that occour around the world have same direct and undirect result which makes the opportunity to live better in personal and public life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08777429467 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76168609963 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570532915361 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1518918024 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.2 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201302884976 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063159239872 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534662684235 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119928125826 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447144795962 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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