Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Few would deny that we are immersed in the flow of information while we still starve for knowledge. Recently the issue of whether to get to know everything that happening around the whole world has concentrated much public attention. While some may claim that there is no need to acquire news that is not relevant to them, I still insist that it is of vital importance to keep actively noticed of the new tendency especially when comprehensive factors are taken into consideration.
To begin with, keeping the news acquainted is auspicious for our economic command. To be more specific, all events happen for some certain reasons so a single accident may leave various severe consequences, which is also called the 'Butterfly Effect'. Taking my father's personal experience as an instance, he has been investing in stocks for over five years and he decided to quit the stock market last year. When I consulted him about the reason why he gave up continuing the investment that seemed to possess an increasing interest rate. He just told me that the Covid-19 quarantine period would leave a disastrous influence on the economy in all aspects so the wisest way to recover from the loss was to quit right now. And the economic downside later stands for a compelling piece of evidence of his words.
Furthermore, getting to know the news facilitates our communication skills. There is an ocean of examples coming from the occasions that we meet some new friends. When we are not familiar with each other and we are not able to follow the interest of others, chatting about the news that happened recently is a perfect choice to start a conversation. For instance, we might discuss the new policy for global students at Hong Kong University with our new friends. When they make comments from their perspective, we are capable of knowing their personality as well as their view of the world. In consequence, our communication skills could improve at a relatively rapid speed and we are also able to decide whether we are suitable to make friends with someone we meet in a short period of time.
Moreover, learning about the news that might seem far away from us actually broadens our horizons. In essence, we ought to be persistent to keep learning as much as possible for our future academic and career success. There is no doubt that success requires an exhaustive understanding of all situations, diligence as well as talent, which are all so critical that we are not able to ignore each one. In consequence, following the latest news around the whole world will definitely be beneficial to intellectualize ourselves so that we could be more composed when we have to face barriers or complex conditions.
All the reasons discussed above confirm a strong conclusion that it is necessary to become acquainted with global news even if it might seem irrelevant to us. From my perspective, the virtues of the keep informed in terms of better economic management, enhancement of communication skills as well as expanding horizons are never too much to be exalted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 777, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, still, well, while, as to, for instance, no doubt, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2548.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 518.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91891891892 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82195275671 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530888030888 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 804.6 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7197031427 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.333333333 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0994330385469 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319504567698 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.031713814794 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0558956509049 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0125241045943 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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