The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Seemly plausible to hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep, it is so vulnerable in logic that the statement is completely a nonsense of abundant flaws. Nothing can be more ridicule than the standard of choosing employees by their need of sleeping hours per night.
First of all, the sample of 300 male and female attended in this interview is skeptical. Where are they come from? Can they represent the various stratums of different labor sorts? How long is the age range between them? The biased sample can corrupt the credence of an interview or a study.
Second, that the sleeping hours of the interviewees are associated with the success of their firms is ungrounded. How to assess the successful intense of a firm? If a firm is defined as successful, whether the assessing standard should be based on the profit it makes annual or on the speed of its profit growing is unsured. And the assessing standard and proportion have not be given so that it is durable.
Third, it is skeptical that the standard sleeping time is defined as 6 hours. Why this standard of sleeping hours is given is still opaque. It is possible that the researchers only set a standard of dividing persons into two groups of sleeping more or less 6 hours and they did not explore deeper relationships between the sleeping hours length and their progress on people, which is vulnerable to buttress the statement.
Fourth, the sleeping hours can affect human’s working efficiency in some ways, but the influence and interrelation are still remained to be explore more by more clinical researches. For instance, Steven Jobs gets up early in the morning and he can keep vigorous the whole day without more sleeping, while the champion Gu Ailin needs more than 10 hours sleep to keep the efficiency of training. We are not capable of judging a person’s sleeping hours to divide him or her into groups of high efficiency or low efficiency.
What’s more, the statement mentioned that a film’ success includes two important indexes, the annual profit and the growing speed of the firm. Yet there are more essential indexes to assess a firm, rather the mere two mentioned, such as the social popularity of a firm or the worker’s judgments of a firm. A successful firm needs to fulfill so many requirements that it is not plausible to assess a film only by its profits.
To draw a conclusion, the statement is full of logical flaws that it is not supposed to be promoted by any firms unless a firm wants to go into the end by soon.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 376, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'been'.
...essing standard and proportion have not be given so that it is durable. Third, it...
Line 6, column 324, Rule ID: A_PLURAL
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'need'?
... judgments of a firm. A successful firm needs to fulfill so many requirements that it...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, still, third, while, for instance, such as, first of all, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72624434389 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66439867331 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493212669683 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9448954154 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4761904762 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0476190476 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154076338697 0.218282227539 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503588493385 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443604208533 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0747012468793 0.128457276422 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566591822962 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.3550499002 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 442 350
No. of Characters: 2028 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.585 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.588 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.57 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.048 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.661 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.294 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5