Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
News channels come up every hour with a plethora of attracting news, good and bad alike. In this line of thought, so many people hold the conviction that it is not necessary to watch all news and understand what is going on around us. Others, on the contrary, stand on the other side of the continuum. I, personally, concur with the former notion because of content and time issues, on which I will elaborate on what follows.
Firstly, a considerable proportion of today's news is sad and distressing. To be more specific, in today's modern era TV channels, newspapers, and magazines are continuously seeking for news that draw the audience’s attention, no matter who much unpleasant they are. Thus, plenty of events that are presented on these media are distressing and disappointing. In these circumstances, audiences are exposed to news that not only do not assist them in this hectic life but also influence them in a negative way. My personal experience would put this notion into a vivid picture. Last week when I was watching TV, changing channels up and down to find a program to spend time, I accidentally saw a very tragic news. I was about a group of people which were dead while they we trying to pass the border of a European country. being informed by this painful news cause me to get sad and it took me a lot to overcome that. Indeed, had I not been informed about this news, I would not have been that much disappointed.
Secondly, looking for news which are not beneficial for us is waste of time. To clarify more, in today's hectic lives human beings' are overwhelmed with plethora of task and time is a real matter for them. They, usually, pass over most of entertainments and even spending time with family members in order to seize sometime of utilize it for accomplishing their duties. In this condition, dedicating plenty of time to learn about other individuals’ private life, which have no benefit for us, or event which are, generally, full of sad news such as mass murder, air crashes, war news from Mideleast, to name but a few, can bring us wide array of consequences. For example, student may spend time on internet on news press web sites and learn about surrounding environment but they have to rest fewer and accomplish their assignments which are more beneficial for them.
To wrap it up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons bring us to the conclusion that it is not important to be involved in all which are going around us. For, they take a lot of time from us and because they are in most of the cases sad and distressing news.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 488, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...his hectic life but also influence them in a negative way. My personal experience would put this ...
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Line 2, column 690, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'very tragic news'.
Suggestion: very tragic news
...ogram to spend time, I accidentally saw a very tragic news. I was about a group of people which we...
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Line 2, column 819, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Being
... pass the border of a European country. being informed by this painful news cause me ...
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Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the entertainments') or simply say ''most entertainments''.
Suggestion: most of the entertainments; most entertainments
...tter for them. They, usually, pass over most of entertainments and even spending time with family memb...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2126.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68281938326 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77143632832 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544052863436 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6776005326 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.3 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0833826865131 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272441012414 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0216761641272 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0579430269524 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.01148446214 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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