Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for the government to spend money on art museum and concert halls than on recreational facilities such as swimming pools and playgrounds.
In today's sophisticated and progressive world, city developers and policymakers are faced a plethora of choices to dedicate budget on them and facilitate living life for people. In this line of thought so many people hold the conviction that museums and concert halls do deserve to receive the same amount of money as other public places like playgrounds and swimming pools. Others, on the contrary, stand on the other side of the continuum. I, personally, concur with the former notion because of the number of the people who use the equipment and also paying attention to children, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the first and foremost reason which comes to mind substantiating my opinion is that museums and concert halls have fewer visitors rather than other recreational places. It is crystal clear that, often, individuals with certain lines of thought spend time visiting museums and concert halls and these people are just a small proportion of society. However, other recreational centers give service to an immense number of people and every single person use them several time in a month. Therefore, it is hoped that governors with spending more money on places that more people use to unwind assist them to have happier lives.
The second reason which deserves some words here is that children are not on the list of museums and concert halls visitors. To be more specific, kids as cornerstones of the societies need places to play, make friends, and grow happily. In other words, decision-makers by devoting enough cash on developing playgrounds, swimming pools, and other public places in fact take into account all people in the community and more specifically youngsters. Thus the advantages of paying more money to build more facilities for children guarantees a better future society.
Lastly, some people, on the other hand, might say it is more beneficial to dedicate the same amount of money to museums as recreational places because of their role in helping people to get familiar with our previous generation and history. This claim may sound completely true, at first glance, but my answer to these people is that a society that does not care about people who are living in the modern ear would not pay sufficient attention to past generations too. In fact, in spite of the fact that having knowledge about the past leads us to the right track of success in the future, nations first need healthier human resources to climb the ladder of success.
To wrap it up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons bring us to the conclusion that recreational places such as playground deserve more budgets rather than museums. For, they play a vital role to have happier children in societies and because the number of target people is tremendously high in these places.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, may, second, so, thus, in fact, such as, in other words, in spite of, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2284.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01978021978 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59288875441 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553846153846 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.7453973594 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.352941176 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7647058824 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.29411764706 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22153796912 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691739151959 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571029352857 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122398510248 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453549258758 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.