Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, mass media, such as newspapers, televisions, and the internet have assisted in order to inform people of various events happening around them in different countries. One of the most challenging topics on which there is no consensus among people is about the importance of being aware of all the news. Opinions are divided into whether people should be informed of the latest news, or some news is not of great priority to be aware of them. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that, although the news improves a person's inspiration for reading, not all the events worth knowing. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following essay.
First and foremost, without a shadow of a doubt, people are enslaved by their tasks and jobs. Also each country has its circumstances, which may make people's lives intolerable in various facets. In other words, people are overly burdened with multiplicity chores, which put them under a great amount of pressure and tension. Moreover, reading about tragic news and events have happened around the world not only useful for them but also would make their mental situation even frailer. Take my personal experience as a compelling example of this, a couple of years ago, when I lived in a dormitory, far away from my parents; therefore, I chose reading to make myself busy and forget how much I was homesick. In those days, I had read about an airplane crash, which I wish I would not. In consequence, those days were noticeably abysmal.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that reading or hearing the latest news may be time-consuming. People can use their time more effectively and productively, which ends up in nothing but a prosperous life and social status. As a result, it would be beneficial for one to be concentrated on his/her tasks and follow the news that can be utilized in one's job. For instance, my colleague lost the opportunity of promotion because he was always spending time excessively reading about news on the internet and gets behind his schedules.
In summary of what has been illustrated and discussed in detail, it is a foregone conclusion that it is not necessary to know everything that has occurred around the world. The fact that in this way, people get depressed and mentally ill, coupled with squandering precious time of life, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...tion that, although the news improves a persons inspiration for reading, not all the ev...
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Line 2, column 94, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e are enslaved by their tasks and jobs. Also each country has its circumstances, whi...
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Line 2, column 643, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to read'.
Suggestion: to read
...way from my parents; therefore, I chose reading to make myself busy and forget how much...
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Line 3, column 359, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...follow the news that can be utilized in ones job. For instance, my colleague lost th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, in summary, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2021.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88164251208 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72920032028 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579710144928 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0714254276 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.277777778 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05555555556 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116687778868 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372826564541 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037733552062 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0758233368077 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213408754253 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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