Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days, people are getting more engaged in their life and activities. The ways that people prefer to spend their time have become a controversial topic recently and we may encounter various attitudes toward this specific subject. From my point of view, humans ought to value every second of their life and satisfy themselves by involving in their enjoyment. I feel this for two reasons which I will explore in my following essay.
To begin with, as life keeps going or better to say, time flies I, as an individual, consider time as a precious gift which loss of it, is not acceptable. To be more specific, I recall two years ago when I asked my aged grandfather about his challenging life, to get some advice, he looked at me deeply regretfully and said ' do whatever that cheers you up, regardless of whether or not others acclaim it'. Moreover, he added if I was given another opportunity, I would pursue my dreams and fulfillment.
Secondly, recent studies have proved that when enthusiasm for doing something exists, it will be completed efficiently than a compulsory task. My own experience demonstrates this fact vividly. Almost ten years ago, I was a senior high school student, meanwhile, I was responsible for doing household chores after school which was absolutely odious. In consequence, to get rid of it, I washed the dishes carelessly which sometimes led to make them broken accidentally. In contrast, when I was playing piano, I put an effort into playing it correctly and I approached it with not only my diligence but also my passion for it.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people have arbitrary to devote their time based on their natural inclination. This is because I think humans were not born to conform to rules but their desire. Also, doing personal enjoyment makes life easier and pristine which will increase Life expectancy undoubtedly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 323, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...looked at me deeply regretfully and said do whatever that cheers you up, regardle...
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Line 2, column 371, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...tever that cheers you up, regardless of whether or not others acclaim it. Moreover, he added i...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... diligence but also my passion for it. In conclusion, I strongly believe that peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1561.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93987341772 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80428139665 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651898734177 0.524837075471 124% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.517295097 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.066666667 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0666666667 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13371498084 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0412736878185 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419827976011 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0817142621521 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175024287209 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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