Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days advertisements play a prominent role in capturing more market share, undoubtedly. Although there are eclectic benefits of advertising, imposing restrictions on advertising, aimed at children has called into question recently. Some people believe that it is not disruptive for children under five, to watch advertisements while others feel otherwise. As far as I am concerned, advertisements have negative effects on children and parents should prevent them from watching those unnecessary programs. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following essay.
First and foremost, most of the advertisers use tricks and catchy slogans to persuade people to buy things that they do not need. The same logic applies to children, in other words, advertisements are intended to create unreal needs in children, in consequence, children can not resist having them and parents undergo lots of pressure to purchase the goods for their baby. My own experience demonstrates this concept. My sister who is ten years younger than me had a persistent thirst for an attractive toy advertised on the television and after two months my parents decided to buy it for her birthday. As had been expected, she got unbelievably surprised but after a month she had no longer desire to play with that appealing toy and that was somehow an example of wasting money. This example demonstrates one of the disadvantages of advertisements for children.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that, as some of the advertisements are heavily hyped, this may put children in danger. children between two to five, do not reach maturity and are not able to distinguish right from wrong as a result some advertisements may not be appropriate for them. For instance, back then, my cousin was watching television which was advertising the Batman outfits and its capability of flying. He was watching his fly astoundingly and I was occupied with my thesis when I noticed he is not in front of the television anymore, Therefore, I started to find him. After ten minutes while I kept calling his name in my residence, the telephone rang and my neighbor told me, my cousin was on the roof and was trying to fly with his weird clothes which he had made it himself. If it was not my neighbor's assistance, I would have lost my cousin because of an unrealistic advertisement. This vivid memory can display the disruptions of advertisements in children's behaviors.
In summary, of what has been illustrated and discussed in detail, it is a foregone conclusion that governments should place a ban on advertisements related to children. This is because advertisers try their bests to sell their products regardless of their quality and some advertisements lead children to behave uncontrollably.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, in summary, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2361.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12147505423 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12660440602 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553145336226 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3911885722 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.05 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.05 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198550489159 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658347250496 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041403383663 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123970226467 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200314411188 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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