Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, young people live differently from the way that their parents used to. One of the most challenging topics on which there is no consensus among people is how hard life it is for the youths? Opinions are divided into whether youths have been undergone a great amount of pressure and tension by governments, or they experience more freedom compared to the past. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that juveniles suffer from strict rules today. There are several reasons to support this, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following essay.
First and foremost, without a shadow of a doubt, the proliferation of technology leads to fast-paced changes in new generations' beliefs; therefore, rules seem to be outdated and not well-suited for the necessities of society. In other words, the internet enables people to remove some barriers that once were believed to be inappropriate. As a result, they are less adhere to the ethical principles and cross boundaries to some extend. To be more specific, my cousin, who is only ten, spends most of his time out and gets back home late at night; however, when I was at that age, I should not have met my friends without my parents' permission. Moreover, my cousin is always complaining about the restrictions imposed on them in society.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that these days, there is an influx of mental disorders among adolescents, which might be adverse effects of tightening the rules. Also, according to statistics, youths are more inclined to harm themselves and commit suicide. When they were asked about the main reason for these absurd behaviors, they mentioned the limitations in society. Although it might seem that we are living in developed countries, there is a massive need for reform in the legislation. If governments do not pay painstaking attention to these disasters, there will be nothing left but some potentials that were killed.
In summary of what has been illustrated and discussed in detail, it is a foregone conclusion that there should be less emphasis on the unbearable rules. The fact that most of the laws are obsolete, coupled with calamitous news we have heard about our youths recently, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
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Suggestion: extent
...principles and cross boundaries to some extend. To be more specific, my cousin, who is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, while, in summary, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93733681462 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77043799996 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584856396867 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4882827255 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.235294118 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5294117647 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0947345494984 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0302677594728 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384501932625 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0581933511573 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051878647398 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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