Your school wants to improve the quality of students' life in the dormitory. Which one of the following do you think the school should build in dorms? 1. Quiet study area (A quiet place for study) 2. Exercise room for students to keep physical well-being 3. Room for entertainment (like watching movies
In the modern era, managers have been seeking novel ways to enhance their productivity and reputation. In different aspects of society, the terms "productivity" differs. The same logic applies to universities and especially their dormitory. One of the most challenging topics on which there is no consensus among managers is the best way to increase life quality in a dormitory. Opinions are divided into providing a quiet room, building an exercise room, and a place for entertainment. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that among the proposed options, the most effective one is to provide students with a spacious place where they can do exercise. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following essay.
First and foremost, students living in a dormitory encounter numerous problems and hurdles that make the situation intolerable, and they need some sort of escapism to unwind. In other words, learners are not only obliged to accomplish their assignments appropriately and learn all ins and outs about different materials being taught in classes but also they should cope with various students living in the same room. The cultural discrepancy may be the main precipitant for dissatisfaction. Therefore, students will go under a great amount of pressure and tension, so they will need some sort of escapism. Doing exercise can release both mental and physical tension. Take my personal experience as a compelling example of this. A couple of years ago, when I was accepted in a university far from my residence, I feel depressed and desperate, so I chose to go swimming in my university to forget all the problems and get some energy. Had I not decided to go there, life would have become tough for me at that time.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that without a shadow of a doubt, doing exercises regularly will make an individual look good and help him/her to stay in shape, which boosts one's self-satisfaction. Doing physical activities is one of the main participant for being healthy. Students do not pay painstaking attention to their physical health, and it is proved these days considerable proportions of adults are suffering from their frail bodies, and have confessed that, if they had been provided with an equipped place to do sport, fewer diseases would have got in their middle age.
In summary of what has been illustrated and discussed in detail, it is a foregone conclusion that constructing a gym-like place would be the best choice to satisfy students. The fact that being in shape is a prominent factor in one's satisfaction, coupled with the reduction of stress level, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, while, i feel, in summary, sort of, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2281.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0353200883 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02522825645 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565121412804 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.5350283685 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.05 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.65 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240607839194 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683342422426 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647791638664 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136007266666 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479468953611 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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