Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, education has played a prominent role in the prosperity of a society. One of the most challenging topics on which there is no consensus among people is the efficiency of education. Opinions are divided as to whether teaching children is an arduous task these days, or in the past, it was tough to teach them different materials. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that although they are busy with brand-new devices, they learn the school's subjects more effectively compared to the past. There are several reasons to support this, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following essay.
First and foremost, with the proliferation of technology, students have access to disseminating information via the internet, which helps them to understand various facts properly. To illustrate, the growth of technology brought about not only convenience but also provided students with numerous online articles as well as data. As a result, students will use them in order to push back the frontiers of knowledge and become well-educated persons. To talk about this in detail, my cousin, who is only eight, is able to tell different countries, their capitals, and which continent they are located. This is because his teacher has assigned them to get information about specific countries and learn about them. Thanks to the internet and its visual graphs and data, my cousin became so interested in learning about countries.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that without a shadow of a doubt, governments have been paying painstaking attention to the children's education recently and provide them with more world-class equipment, which eases the process of learning. To elaborate, the educational system is more respected compared to the past; therefore, governments invest more money on that, and the children are able to do some practical experiments in an equipped laboratory. In consequence, they will be acquainted with some concepts comprehensively and will climb the ladder of success in their future status. For instance, in the aforementioned situation, my cousin learns some physics concepts with some basic experiments in his school. So, it is less likely for him to have difficulties in solving physic problems.
In summary of what has been illustrated and discussed in detail, it is a foregone conclusion that students learn concepts more easily. The fact that the internet helps them learn without any difficulties, coupled with more monetary aids, is being allocated to educations recently, is the reason which strengthens my view.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ency of education. Opinions are divided as to whether teaching children is an arduous task th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, in summary, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25060240964 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95135575598 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568674698795 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6569722783 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.055555556 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0555555556 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166623897521 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048952065883 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0322844026168 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101254125283 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303672872163 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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