Your university wants to improve the quality of students’ life in the dormitory. Which one of the following do you think the school should build in dorms?
1) quiet study area
2) exercise room for students to keep physical well-being
3) room for entertainment
There are diverse types of advanced facilities in modern society. This will raise the question of which one of the following should the school build in dorms, study areas, exercise rooms, or entertainment rooms. I will take the position that the university should establish more exercise rooms.
First of all, building an exercise room could make students keep a great habit of maintaining health. Take my previous experience as an example. When I was a freshman, I always stayed up late to study a variety of tough courses and lack of exercising, such as data structure or algorithms. Thus, my healthy condition became worse and worse. However, in 2016, the college decided to construct a new gym in the dorm having lots of greatly useful equipment, including treadmills and dumbbells. With these especially pragmatic tools, I started to work out for thirty minutes per day with my classmates. After several months, we could feel that our health level raising largely than before. By contrast, if the university had chosen to establish more entertainment rooms instead of exercise rooms, we might have not been able to create healthy habits.
Second, establishing an exercise room could have students improve their social skills deeply. My previous experience will be a suitable example. When I was a freshman, I was not good at expanding my contact network. Yet, when I chose to work out in the gym of the dorm every day, I could know a variety of friends from different departments, such as computer science or civil engineering. With them, we could exchange diverse thoughts about college life, such as internship opportunities or interesting courses. Furthermore, we also attended many diverse types of competitions, such as football or baseball contests, in which we obtained lots of trophies. In contrast, if we had decided to build more study areas, we might not have been capable of boosting our social skills.
To sum up, these are the two reasons why I hold the belief that the university should construct more exercise rooms. On one hand, we could establish a beneficial habit for ourselves. On the other hand, we could raise our social skills.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, thus, in contrast, such as, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1810.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05586592179 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77050478497 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54748603352 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.4492699294 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1904761905 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0476190476 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7619047619 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191381548444 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532204255473 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618952191937 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123288616804 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352258133055 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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