Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
This topic leads me to think of my college life which affected my life a lot when I was still an undergraduate. This raises the question of whether sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support at universities and colleges. My view is that sports and social activities should receive equal financial support from universities and colleges.
First of all, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries because colleges can make students learn teamwork by holding these kinds of events. For example, when I was an undergraduate, the college I studied often held a lot of sports competitions, like basketball or football games, to let students learn teamwork in these sports games, and it worked because when we get a champion in these events, we could understand each other more and use this valuable experience in other events that need teamwork. To cite an instance, when I was eighteen years old, I attended a football team in my college. With this chance, I can totally immerse myself in the football game and learn how to establish distinguished teamwork with my teammates. As a result, we use these kinds of prized experiences to win more and more games and realize the method of building teamwork with other people. By contrast, if colleges don’t hold these sports events, we will not truly understand what true teamwork is.
Second, sports and social activities should receive as much budget as classes and libraries because some of these events that will need a lot of money to maintain their quality can only be held by colleges. For example, when I still studied at the university, I often participated in some social activities that were held by my college, and these events tended to need the college to provide financial support to accomplish. Initially, few students would attend these sports and social activities because of their terrible quality. However, when more and more students required the college to make a change and improve this problem, the college finally decide to put much money into these events to raise their quality. By contrast, if sports and social activities can not receive as much budget as classes and libraries, these events will be more difficult to sustain their quality.
To conclude, these are the two reasons why I hold the belief that sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries. In addition, I would say that sports and social activities not only make us more successful in college but also influence our future deeply.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...was still an undergraduate. This raises the question of whether sports and social activities are just a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, so, still, for example, in addition, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2181.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01379310345 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67033635729 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.413793103448 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.6127732575 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.3125 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1875 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317909348517 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141795105632 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136683039079 0.0737576698707 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238364143101 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107540074577 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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