Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, the renowed athletes' news has become crucially important for ordinary people. Most of the people are tempting to follow their styles and outfits. One of the most challenging topics on which there is no consensus among people is about famous people's privacy. Opinions are divided into whether people should respect celebrities' privacy, or they have the right to be curious about their lives. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that entertainers should be behaved respectfully in different aspects, even their privacies. There are several reasons to support this, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following essay.
First and foremost, without a shadow of a doubt, one of the foundations of civilization in all cities is equality. In other words, in retrospect, people used to behave discriminately. To be more specific, affluent families have the authority to possess their desires and intervene in various facets of society, even the one that was none of their businesses. However, after the revolution, numerous rules were imposed consisting of social equality. In consequence, people with extra income have the same rights in society. Athletes should have civil rights in modern civilization; otherwise they do not consider themselves human living in contemporary society, and their needs will not be fulfilled.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that when people keep their eyes on well-known individuals, they are not able to be concentrated on their tasks to accomplish them appropriately. As a result, their efficiency will decrease because most of their time will be allocated to their prestige, clothes, placid demeanor. As a case in point, one of the actors of my country was handsome and charming that persuaded girls to send him a bouquet and luxurious gifts; moreover, he was overly burdened with multiplicity tasks and movies that left him no time to settle and rest. Therefore, he postponed some of his contracts, which leads to his bankruptcy. Had others not invaded his personal life, he would have prospered in his occupation.
In summary of what has been illustrated and discussed in detail, it is a foregone conclusion that everyone's life and privacy should be respected. The fact that the prominent rights of each citizen are to ensure their privacy, coupled with the more someone is being observed, the more probable he/she will fail in his/her responsibilities, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, while, in summary, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2084.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17121588089 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89482783606 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5682382134 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.939206235 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.684210526 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2105263158 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138822271148 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440907173142 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0361087166725 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0886529360019 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031793036273 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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