Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, governments have been paying painstaking attention to the education system. One of the most challenging topics on which there is no consensus among people is money investment. Opinions are divided as to whether governments should finance children's' education or universities should be prioritized. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that although universities play a prominent role in prospering a society, children should be more valued. There are several reasons to support this, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following essay.
First and foremost, without a shadow of a doubt, people can learn materials more effectively when they are young. In other words, the younger, the more knowledge they can gain. To illustrate, children five to ten are in the golden time of their lives; this is because they have well-developed minds compared to the older ones; therefore, these will improve their productivities. As a result, governments' monetary aids would be more cost-effective. To talk in detail, these days, almost all the kindergartens of my city are well-equipped not only with appropriate tools but also with well-educated teachers. In consequence, children will climb the ladder of success much earlier than their parents.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that learning various subjects fundamentally is one of the main precipitants for thriving in the future that can be reached through proper education methods at an early age. To elaborate, schools are the cradles of education. So schools have influences on the students, especially when they are too young. In this way, they will be motivated to participate in the classes; moreover, materials taught in the classes would lead to the success of the students if the educators were able to convey them in an organized way to easily comprehend. To be more specific, my cousin, who is only eight, is learning new methods of calculation, which is an immense asset, especially in the exam, because it will not only increase his self-confidence but also increase his function in the exam. This will eventually result in his prosperity because he got acquainted with some novel methods of calculation when he was too young in the schools.
In summary of what has been illustrated and discussed in detail, it is a foregone conclusion that investing money on the children's education will be more productive. The fact that children learn faster, coupled with having a useful foundation, is the reason which strengthens my view.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... money investment. Opinions are divided as to whether governments should finance childrens ed...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, in summary, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19464720195 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04762955283 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549878345499 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2693857023 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.368421053 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6315789474 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174346631941 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519308244632 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0279844990157 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112213836267 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304330199482 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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