Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, awareness plays a major role in many aspects of life, such as the social aspect or economic aspect. People may tend to know about their surroundings and assume this knowledge as a powerful tool that can be beneficial for them. However, I strongly believe that excessive awareness and be exposed to tons of redundant knowledge is not necessary, and I have two main reasons for my point of view.
First, people nowadays have enough stress and tension in their own life and, adding some extra bad news to their life not only will not help them with their future plans but also increase the tension in their simple lives. In this cruel world, heart-breaking news is affecting people's feelings every day and, not being at the reach of this news would even be an advantage of unawareness. For instance, two years ago, a dramatic explosion occurred in my country, affecting many families. Many lost their siblings and, police investigation revealed that that explosion was an intentional attack. At that time, I was preparing for my university entrance exam and, I needed to be focused; however, after hearing about the cause of the explosion, my emotions were hurt, and I got depressed for two months. Had I not be aware of that news, I would have passed my exam more successfully.
Second, fake news could easily influence someone's life and have detrimental repercussions. We live in a modern era with too many news broadcasting agencies that their major goal is to attract more audiences. In order to achieve this goal, some of these agencies do not consider anything but their benefits. So, they try to sell their news and get more and more attention from people. To be more specific, these firms, by providing more appealing issues, intend to gain more power than before and, subsequently, heighten the value of their market price. This indifferent view of honesty will lead to a more competitive approach among broadcasting agencies. As a result, If a person wants to know about all over the world, he/she should accept the fact that much of this news is fake and unreliable.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that this is not vital to know everything about our world because this knowledge would sometimes cause an emotionally harsh situation and, some of the news we heard is not even real and trustable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...sions. We live in a modern era with too many news broadcasting agencies that their m...
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Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much news', 'a good deal of news'.
Suggestion: much news; a good deal of news
...sions. We live in a modern era with too many news broadcasting agencies that their major ...
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Line 4, column 175, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...use an emotionally harsh situation and, some of the news we heard is not even real and trus...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1930.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.825 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65779984197 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7650680948 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.529411765 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5294117647 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70588235294 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0880014832234 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0299781915705 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0214164115132 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0589312096938 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00825220429854 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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