Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
One of the most prominent duties of a government is to allocate its limited budget in a plausible way and providing monetary help for different organizations in a justifiable way. Some of the people think it is more rational to spend the budget on university progression to have a more successful country, while others hold the opposite opinion. I, personally, believe that universities should be prioritized for several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored.
First of all, universities would be more influential in the prosperity of a country. These organizations provide an atmosphere for talented students to reach their goals, and as a result, they could contribute to the main aims of a country. Talented students in the university encounter more fundamental and challenging problems directly related to the flourishment of the society and country. This allocated budget can be utilized to equip the laboratories and hasten the procedure of conducting research. Therefore, students would be able to push back the frontiers of knowledge and make a great contribution to their countries' thrives. For instance, a couple of years ago, my teacher at university conducted research on a specific type of concrete. He was of the opinion that the outcomes of that research could be a great development for the science of concrete and the government could employ the results in real-world projects. This type of concrete could be used for the marine project which were the most demanding type of projects for civil engineers. Thanks to the new grant that he had been given, he was able to proceed with the research and made a considerable contribution to our country's development.
Second, Students of the universities are examined in a different way, and as a result, they are the best pupils entering the universities, thus, it is more likely for them to help the development of the country. Financing the education of young children may have a valuable effect on the future of a country, but I believe the talented students who are now in the universities are the former children that made a considerable effort to acheive this status, hence, they are more aware of the opportunity that they have been given, and they will put their heart and soul in accomplishing their tasks. Consequently, although the education of children is of great importance, financing universities would be more efficient and may have a greater impact on the country's development.
In conclusion, the fact that funding the universities will provide a situation for talented students to prosper and contribute to the final aims of the country, and as those students are aware of the opportunity which is provided for them and they have been examined to be here are my reasons to support my view.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...udents of the universities are examined in a different way, and as a result, they are the best pup...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2343.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08242950108 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04038068653 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451193058568 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.5024118737 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.4375 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8125 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190488605393 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677183126137 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032836015079 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119849577292 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301654051213 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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