Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, education is one of the most paramount issues for humans. Nowadays with the recent developments in technology, some people believe that the process of teaching and learning has become more demanding, while, others hold the opposite viewpoint. I of the opinion that educating children is now a lot easier than before because of several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored.
First, these technologies can be adopted to enhance the education process. With the development of new technologies such as cell phones and social media, it is now feasible to conduct a class or even an exam over the Internet. Employing such tools would be considerably beneficial for some specific aspects of education. Consider a topic that requires the teacher to paint a picture so as to explain the subject to students more profoundly. It would be a challenging and time consuming task, but, with the help of new technologies, this arduous task has become an easy task. To elucidate, educators now can use some visualization tools such as a set of a computer and video projector to show the intended image to their students. Had they not have such hel[ful tool, they would have not had the opportunity to transfer their knowledge comprehensively.
Second, new generations of children have developed intellectual abilities which can assist them to perform their work more completely and grasp the information that is taught to them more deeply. Children are exposed to a wide variety of knowledge and data through the Internet, therefore, their mind has the capacity to absorb more material. Sometimes, children have more knowledge about a particular subject than their teachers, and this a result of being exposed to such a valuable source of information. For instance, my younger brother uses his cellphone to search for anything that challenges his mind, and he almost always finds some practical solutions to his problems. His thirst for knowledge would never be quenched, and I am of the belief that the perseverance he is showing now will affect his academic performance in the near future.
In conclusion, I believe that new technologies like cell phones and social media can be utilized to improve the quality of education, as a result, they could ease the process. In conjunction with using new technologies in a positive way, the children are now more bright, thus, they can grasp their lessons more profoundly which could be an impact of utilizing new technologies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 384, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...requires the teacher to paint a picture so as to explain the subject to students more pr...
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Line 4, column 757, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: ']' seems to be missing
...eir students. Had they not have such hel[ful tool, they would have not had the op...
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Line 9, column 220, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...conjunction with using new technologies in a positive way, the children are now more bright, thus...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12224938875 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91743498308 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540342298289 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2305080095 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.235294118 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0588235294 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160980636273 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538291904994 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0302036822472 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103491867554 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260466889737 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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