Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Allocating budget to different parts of a university is always of great importance. Wrong choices could lead to unexpected consequences and squandering the money. So it seems crucial to make a precise decision on how financial support should be spent. As a student, I strongly recommend not to outweigh any of these two options over another. I will explore the reasons for my viewpoint in the following passage.
First of all, I think mental health is as important as physical, and a proven way to have mental health is a daily workout. In addition to physical exercises, social activities and interacting with other students is a promising factor in being mentally thriving. As an instance, I remember the time I was a freshman in the university, and due to a new situation, which is because I migrated from another city to Tehran, I was not as energetic as I was before. Consequently, I was not able to focus on my education appropriately. In those gloomy days, A saving thought sparked in my mind, which was the milestone in my university life. The gym was the place where I found peace and energy and helped me to restore my motivations to study and learn. Also, incorporating in some group activities and be a member of science society helped me through those harsh days.
Secondly, A college or university student is required to be a well-educated person and someone who can value other dimensions of life, such as communication, art, etc. However, the typical curriculum of universities does not contain something to illustrate those different dimensions. My personal experience is a showcase for the reason I have mentioned. When I was an undergraduate student, I attended a political analysis class in which I learned too much about how I can analyze society's situation. As a result of this examination, I am able to make precise decisions about the business I am involved in.
In conclusion, I believe that social activities and sports for students have a significant effect on the quality of college or university life. Also, as I mentioned before, this effect is not neglectable in real life, too. Therefore they should be considered as noteworthy as the academic aspect of the university.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1839.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9435483871 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10396580384 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564516129032 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1064143527 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.95 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129373008474 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0352928697295 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382200242704 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0804329029049 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222809839796 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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