Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Learning knows no bound. Some people believe that people should only concentrate on the fields or the events that would add value to their life. However, if I were asked I would definitely think that people should always know about the event happening around them despite the fact that it has no direct connection with their daily life. I firmly believe this way because of several reasons, and I will elaborate on these in the subsequent paragraphs.
First and foremost, knowing about multiple events aids to broaden your knowledge. Apart from your day to day work, when you invest your time to know about other events or activities happening around you, you get to know about multiple cultures, people's thinking which makes a huge impact on enriching your personality. Many television channels provides range of programs covering art, history, lifestyle of different people from different country. As a result, watching these shows, you get to know about the sculptures, history of different places all over the world. My opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my own experience. You see, I am a software engineer. Although I am a science major, I had interest about attending the events based on the ancient art from my childhood. I kept my interest alive and I spent my leisure time attending seminars, going to exhibition to know more about it. There I meet new people and also know about their culture. As a result, it helps me broaden my knowledge. For this reason, If I had never invested my time on other events apart from my own field, I would have never been so enthusiastic about art.
Secondly, being aware of the activities around you helps you to be a responsible citizen. When you keep your eye on other activities like sports, politics, society etc, you get to know about all other aspects which you should know for being a citizen. As a result, you can express your views on those matter for the betterment of your community and so country. Drawing from my own experience, from my childhood itself, I used to watch news every night to keep myself updated with the events happening around me. Last year after a terrible storm attacked out state, West Bengal, many people became homeless. One of the advertisement, I came to know about a group who are donating medicines, foods, shelter to these people and also appealing others to join their group. As a result, on the immediate day itself, I called them from the given phone no in the advertisement and distributed foods to many people in Sundarban. It is certainly clear that unless I had spent my time to know about other event which will not affect my daily life, I would have never involved myself in such a great activity.
To sum up, in the light of the above mentioned point I strongly believe that people should involve themselves to know about events happening around the world. This is because it has a great impact on making enhancing your knowledge as well as makes your a better human being.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, apart from, as a result, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2482.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 518.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79150579151 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54964277585 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484555984556 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1331904114 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.28 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.72 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271476049473 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785745228624 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654359265007 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181775919775 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247405987626 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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