Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Innovation has both positive and negative impact on the society. Although some people believe that playing computer games helps children to improve their imagination capabilities, however, I strongly believe that it can significantly affect children's life both physically and mentally. I feel this way because of several reasons, and, I will develop on this ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, playing computer games could bring the communication gap among the parents and their child. After daily hectic life, now a days, the children spend most of their leisure time playing computer games, sometimes in a group with their friends. They hardly have some time help their parents in house chores work, moreover having some discussion about their futures with their parent. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my own experience. You see, my brother is ten years old now. Everyday, after coming back from school or tution, he got busy playing car race games. Moreover, sometimes he spends his entire evening playing virtual computer games with his friend. I remember, at his age, I used to go to playground besides taking up the responsibility of helping my mother in cooking. As a result. it played an vital role in strengthening my bonding with my parents and at the same time. For this reason, if I would not have spent time with my mother learning cooking as well as helping her, I would not have prepared food for myself while staying in an apartment during my graduation days to keep myself stay fit.
Secondly, playing computer games can cause significant damage to eyes. Now-a-days with the advent of internet, kids utilize resources available in the internet to study. So, if they spent the leisure time for playing the computer games, they are constantly looking the bright computer screen, which can cause retinal detachment. Moreover, they are not having any physical excersize which can hamper their fitness and could be reason for some deadly diseases at early age. Drawing from my own experience, when I was in my school, I used to spend my time sitting in front of desktop for more that eight hours to play chase games. But, after a few months, I started feeling some pain in my eyes, not surprisingly, I ignored and also never told my parents about it. Consequently, the situation got worst and almost after one year, I was diagnosed with holes in my retina and I had to go through surgery. So, it is certainly clear to see that if I would have never been so addicted to spend my time playing computer games, I would not have to pass through such a pathetic time in my life.
In the light of the above mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that children should be prohibited from play computer games for prolonged time period, This is because they can spent those time more productively and can improve their fitness thinking about their future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, i feel, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2434.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89738430584 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57265473013 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529175050302 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 745.2 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6347832535 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.826086957 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6086956522 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52173913043 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209426387188 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680886948105 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567586245101 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142486186811 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031243720978 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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