Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
In today's bustling world, individuals are preoccupied with working round-the-clock so as to cater to all essential needs of their families. Although some of them prefer to work longer hours with fewer workdays, others stand at the other end of the continuum, presuming that it is better to have a career where they require to fulfil their tasks in shorter work shifts divided into more working days. Personally, I concur with the former group, and the reasons to substantiate my mindset are explained in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that employees who are enjoying less workdays can have a better mental health by relaxing amid holidays, leading to a better mood for them. To be more specific, humans' brain can perform well when it is given sufficient rest. Indeed, working roughly all the week, individuals will not find quality time to relax and relief their mind. In this vein, it is more likely to become stressed out, leading to health-related problems ultimately. Those that are burning the midnight oil in order to make additional amounts of money are overlooking their health to a great extent; thus, they may face monumental challenges such as depression, bipolar disorder, and the like. Consequently, should workers want to have a high efficiency in the workplace, they will need to choose vocations where the numbers of working days are confined. By doing so, since they are in comfort midst workdays, they can feel the shadow of happiness in their lives.
Furthermore, it is obvious that people having less workdays with prolonged hours can go for their passions, flourishing their latent talents and becoming blissful at the end of the day. To elucidate on, all of us have arrived at this terrestrial plant with a special gift. As a matter of fact, it is our duty to nurture it and discover this magnificent aptitude in our lifetime. Individuals enjoying more spare time can unlock this treasure with untapped flairs by fulfilling works that fall into the category of their interests. When doing what they like, people will figure out their talent and can be able to horn it to a great extent; As a result, they may feel those joyful moments they have always dreamt of. Hence, people should be employed in aforesaid professions so that they can be happier in life.
To wrap it up, taking all the aforementioned points and reasons into account, one can rationally draw the conclusion that it is more cheerful for employees to have occupations with less working days. This is owe to the fact that not only can they have a better mental condition, but they can also thrive their flairs eventually.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...reoccupied with working round-the-clock so as to cater to all essential needs of their f...
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Line 1, column 324, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fulfilling'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: fulfilling
...ter to have a career where they require to fulfil their tasks in shorter work shifts divi...
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Line 3, column 68, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun workdays is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...l clear that employees who are enjoying less workdays can have a better mental healt...
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Line 5, column 47, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun workdays is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...rmore, it is obvious that people having less workdays with prolonged hours can go fo...
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Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'owed'.
Suggestion: owed
...pations with less working days. This is owe to the fact that not only can they have...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, so, thus, well, as to, in short, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, to begin with, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2209.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93080357143 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67413229627 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537946428571 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0001574701 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.722222222 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8888888889 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197923552762 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063104932044 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555959837736 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135555701407 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021478371199 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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