Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Undoubtedly having a job and making money play a crucial role in individuals’ lives. Due to its paramount importance, employees' efficiency under different circumstances has been usually discussed and it is believed by some people that working for long hours only three days a week is much more enjoyable than working on weekdays regularly. In my opinion, working for fewer days during the week is much more beneficial for employees.
First of all, working just three days a week helps people to have much more free time which can be spent on their personal lives and interests. For example, nowadays most parents have to work every day and they cannot spend enough time with their children. Therefore, most parents can barely establish a close connection with their children and have a loving relationship that may have negative effects on children’s future lives. In addition, having more days off, let parents have adequate time in order to plan for doing activities with their children which need consecutive days off like taking short trips and going to the countryside.
Secondly, some studies have shown that the majority of people are more efficient under pressure and long working hours. In other words, working for long hours during the day help people keep doing their jobs with less distraction and more concentration. For example, my sister teaches mathematics at school in five grades in just three days a week and she is so productive and fresh in comparison with last year when she had to teach for just two hours every day at school. Now she has more time to take rest and recharge her batteries which causes her to be energetic and relaxed while she is at her work.
In conclusion, having a job for three days in a week with longer working hours is preferable compared to a costumery job on weekdays. Not only does it provide more free time for family members to spend with each other, but also it helps most employees to be productive under pressure and long hours of working.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 170, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has usually been
...fficiency under different circumstances has been usually discussed and it is believed by some pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1668.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87719298246 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57224866318 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517543859649 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.9043263536 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.307692308 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3076923077 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6153846154 5.45110844103 213% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437466406379 0.236089414692 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182875300595 0.076458572812 239% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0975675777699 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.308358218325 0.150856017488 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540862964039 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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