Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that rules have a crucial impact on society. There has always been a controversial debate on whether rules are too strict for young people. In my opinion, I strongly stand for this viewpoint that young individuals do not face harsh regulations today. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, implementing rules helps society have more modest citizens, and valuable rules teach people to become better citizens with moral values. As a result, people can feel peace and satisfaction in society. For example, in Korea, students have to work in a charity and voluntary activity in the summer after they turn sixteen. For example, the students can teach children from low-income families who do not have access to free education. This might be considered as a rigid rule which restricts students' freedom, but these young students can learn how to help poor people and feel helpful with this job. Not only do they practice learning a skill, but also they feel useful about themselves. They will also remember their precious experience and always care for helpless people when they get an adult.
Secondly, law enforcement helps protect people from any harm and injuries by not being allowed to take some actions which can hurt themselves or other people. For example, in most countries, people do not have permission to drive a car until they turn eighteen. This law confines youngsters to ride a car at early ages because they do not have enough driving experience, and also they get easily tempted to imitate adult drivers, so they will ride a vehicle as fast as they can, even without touching the car steering wheel. For instance, many car accidents had occurred in the USA before the driving law changed. Since then, people can drive a car just after they turn eighteen years old, and the number of car accidents has surprisingly decreased.
In conclusion, it is believed by some people that rules are too harsh for young individuals. However, I think that rules are not too restricted and not only provide a better society but also prevent people from physical damage and injuries.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1800.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91803278689 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50528421207 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55737704918 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6812628742 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.55555555556 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154686067438 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576372212961 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448244826088 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117115738503 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517278754814 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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