Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to support
In today's modern world, work has become the most critical part of human lives. Its influence on every facet of our lives is undeniable. With this in mind, there is always controversy on how to manage working time, whether to work a few days especially 3 days a week with long hours, or it is better to work more days a week with shorter hours. While some people believe that working only three days a week is great and brings more benefits to both the economy and employees, others stand on the other side of the continuum. I, personally speaking, hold the view that working five days per week is better and its advantages overweigh its drawbacks. Not only does not it make the workers very tired, but also it provides a happier life for them besides their families.
First and foremost, three days working in a week requires very long hours of work. Today, people who work five days a week have to work 8 hours per day, if one wants to work only three days, they have to work twelve to thirteen hours per day, which is very frustrating. Even, today with eight hours of work, many workers feel that the working time is heavy and they can't tolerate this working time. In fact, they are true, one survey showed that after five hours of work, people lose their concentration and their efficiency drops dramatically. Therefore, imagine employees after longer hours of work, they will not be able to raise a pen. A personal experience can drive this notion home. Last year, I started my first job in a well-known company in Tehran, because I was fresh, and I wanted to make sufficient money, I was working almost twice an average person in the company, soon I got exhausted and after some days I felt that I needed some rest and I took a vacation to recover my energy. This experience showed me that working for so many hours is very hard and not beneficial.
As a second noteworthy point to mention about working three days per week is that its weekends become very long and boring. Although, many people believe that leisure time is enjoyable, and the more one gets free time, the more he or she will be happy. Actually, this claim is not convincing, almost everyone pursues a goal in their lives. One person maybe wants to become a successful athlete, someone else wants to become a famous scientist, to name but a few. In this way, trying is sweet, and people enjoy working hard in order to achieve their targets. Additionally, many people feel bored in long hours of free time. When they have for example three or four-day vacation, soon they become tedious and want to get back to work. While it may seem that longer weekends is helpful for employees to spend more time with their families and as a result, they become happier. But, when a person becomes bored of being free, he or she starts to bother nearby persons.
In conclusion, having considered the aforementioned reasons and points in mind, working five days a week is more enjoyable than three days. Not only does it make the employee more comfort, but also it increases their happiness due that they do not become bored during long weekends and spend a happier time with their families. I hope that one-day governments regulate the working hours in the best way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2663.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 580.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59137931034 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36282331272 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46724137931 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 816.3 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5182234339 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.423076923 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343803174164 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10456549879 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971357617357 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24705387876 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584026565162 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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